I really enjoy the twin story you have created. It took me a few time to figure out all the scenes. I agreed that the Twin story followed Segmenting and Personalization principle . However, I wonder if it is also followed the coherence principle. Also I wonder if adding some visual images will help the reader focus because of the coherence principle

I think use Twine Story as an educational resource is a perfect idea. I talked about it in my post as well. Stories are easier to remember than facts

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